The Call




For the seventh time, he dint answer her call because he was angry at her for not calling him throughout the day.


The next morning he got a call from the police saying that the girl had an accident last night while driving using cell and his number was first on the recent call list..!!


*******


P.S. : This is my first attempt at writing 55 fiction, a form of fiction to be completed within a limit of 55 words.Its really challenging to complete the story in just 55 words. I found it interesting and so decided to give it a try..!! Do let me know how it was and if there are any suggestions for further improvement.!!!


My inspiration for this was my blog mate Shruti..!! Cheers to you yaar, you write fabulous stories in just 55 words..!!!


Comments

Shruti said…
Hey girlie :)
This 55Fiction was damn cool :)
Loved it!

U got inspired by me? Wow :)
October 22, 2009 at 10:42 PM
Anoop said…
Hey Urvashi
tats cool... :)
October 22, 2009 at 11:11 PM
Ganesh_Dalal said…
WOW.. really interesting..
October 22, 2009 at 11:47 PM
Anoop said…
hey urvashi
let me give u a suggestion?
give a title or label or pic or somethin which shows tat ur post is a 55 fiction... so tat readers can easily identify...

thr r many ppl who r jus lookin for 55Fs... ;)
October 23, 2009 at 12:34 AM
The Illuminator said…
Wow now that's new. So do you continue the story in 55 words other every time?
October 23, 2009 at 3:02 AM
Darshan Chande said…
I loved the concept of 55-fiction. And this story is just great! As for suggestion, I would agree with Anoop's.
October 23, 2009 at 8:08 PM
Siddhesh Kabe said…
ossum...thats nice 55...welcome 2 d world of f-55...:D
October 23, 2009 at 11:01 PM
Ordinary Gal said…
nice fiction...keep writing :)
October 24, 2009 at 11:17 AM
Arnav said…
nice fiction.. Sends a strong message in those 55 words...
:)


Keep writing and smiling :)
October 24, 2009 at 7:50 PM
Dr. Chandana Shekar said…
good job. try writin more...
October 24, 2009 at 11:07 PM
binal said…
hey nice fiction loved it........!!!!!
October 28, 2009 at 9:00 PM
Freelancer said…
oh this is nice. more of a sweet and cute write
October 29, 2009 at 12:40 AM
buckingfastard said…
gr8 by general standards...and as ur writing it fr 1st time...OMG gr8...

it was so complete!! nice!!
October 30, 2009 at 8:33 PM
Nανєєη said…
gud one ... this kind of irony is hard to deal with
October 30, 2009 at 11:16 PM
Harini said…
Hi Urvashi

I really liked it... Good one:)
November 3, 2009 at 4:33 PM
HaRy!! said…
now thats how yu bring awareness!! nice one !!!
November 6, 2009 at 9:23 PM
Anonymous said…
Hi Urvashi , just dropped in here and found a very cute and cool blog ..Liked all your thoughts :)Keep them flowing ..:)
November 7, 2009 at 6:08 PM
Urvashi said…
@All: thanks 4 the comments..!! Will surely try some more of these fictions in the future..!!

@Anoop, Darshan: I have added a label for 55 fiction as u had suggested..!! Thank u..!! :)
November 11, 2009 at 6:24 PM
Ankita said…
loved all of them..esp ur frst one was very touching!
November 4, 2013 at 3:32 PM
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